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Narrative Essay Contest
I am commenting on Contestant Number Six’s entry into the contest. As it has been over a month since this post, I hope this comment will still prove useful. First of all, I thought this essay was very imaginative. Although the setting appeared to be quite ordinary (a school), the supernatural elements really brought the story to life. The student’s use of descriptive words and phrases such as “monstrous” and clouds “as big as mountains” shows depth of writing and ignites the reader’s imaginations. The “BOOM BOOM” of onomatopoeia describing the thunder was a much-needed touch to bring in all the senses. Good job!
ReplyDeleteContestant Number Fourteen did a wonderful job.The student is very creative and I felt like I was a part of the story. I really liked how he/she put EB for Evil Bear on the bear's cape. The student also did a great job describing everything in the story. This student should be very proud of his/her work.
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